[tilokani]

I had an assignment for a health project. So I figured I might as well do the best damn job in grade 9, so I guess I did. What's fair though, is that all the little pictures in the side I've scanned in myself, which isn't stealing. Cause I'm like, an honest little boy.

http://www.deviantart.com/view/1438612

Anyway, I realized the spelling mistake, and I'll go about fixing that up one day...

Anyway, tell me what you think. ( oh yeah, i made the little man in the corner, and the drug thingee is a lightbulb i scanned in...clever no?)
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[pixelkitten]

Hi!
I like it, neat!!
The only crit might be the arms on your figure, hhmmmm dont know what, theres just something, maybe the left is too long?
But nice colors and everything... =^_^=

[tilokani]

Edit., It's a grammer mistake, not a spelling mistake, in the header.
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[antipro]

hey i like the imagery, but as a graphic design student let me give you some layout critique: you may want to consider the importance of the content. what i mean is what should people read first? to me, i don't want to have to read a whole line to grab my attention. personally i would but the "can you fly" part in big, bold letters first. then say "while ya brothaz are smokin.." below the imagery, and finally in slightly smaller text, the rest of it. and edit it down so it's not so wordy.

in advertising (which is what i think this is) you want to snag em quick, get their interest up, and keep em so they want to read the whole thing. i think the imagery is engaging, but you need an engaging slogan to go along with it. a big Can you Fly would do it for me.

just my 2 cents.

erik
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[tilokani]

oh for shizzy

thanks man, 'preciate it.

i'll fix it up, hack at it here and there and post again in a while

thanks again
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