[Kaete]

Many thanks to everyone who gave c&c last time. Especially thanks to XcelsiorArt, for suggesting it needed more dramatic lighting and a background. Anyway, here's a thumbnail of what I had before and then a pic of what I have now:





Again, I'd love any c&c that anyone can give me. As you can see, it's still rough in the places where I'm still trying to work out the color. I'm a little worried about the shadows on the face. Do you think they're too blue?

[julia]

hi, personnally i like the facial shadows, the blue tint gives a good contrast to the orange in the shirt and so on. i loveur falme ball, btw.

[Highfive]

Gosh, that's beautiful! Like the way the hands are a little out of focus.

I'd suggest adding more backlighting for his tunic and indicating a source for the backlight somewhere in the background. If the lightsource is out of view, have a subtle glow from it's general direction.

[Kaete]

Hmmm... I was trying to make the two white things on the wall look like lamps. They're the kind that are covered with a thin shell of marble/glass that glows softly. Is there anyway I can make it more obvious that they are lamps?

And also.. he's a she. Does she look like a boy? ^_^;;

[ November 15, 2001: Message edited by: Kaete ]

[arkoh]

Looks really really awesome!!! I absolutely adore the feeling of intimacy in the relationship between the girl... no dont you worry she does look like a she.. and the lightsource in her hands! Very powerful!!!

I only have one thought to add... you are takin attention away from the light in the hands of the girl and the face it relates to, and attention away from what is, in my oppinion the focus of your composition, by NOT toning down the background! I really dont seem to undestand this, since you are very deliberately working with the depthblur, and this extremely succesfully, around the girls hands! Why dont you use this skill of yours , to make the background more secondary, to make the depth of focus span from the light to the face? It is especially the two lamps/lights on the wall that you are talkin about, that seem to irritate me a bit! They are very much drawing the center of focus away from the mysterious and intriguing light in the front! This also makes the girls face seem a bit less affectionate than I would like to see it!

So in all, a very powerful and intenisiv piece of work, that in my oppinion could be even more powerfull if you tone down the background a bit, blur it or whatever!

I am really looking forward seeing how this turns out!

[Richard Allen]

First off, I really like this piece. There are only a couple of suggestions that I could make. First, make the reflections in the eyes sharper, as the eyes are wet and reflections tend to be pronounced. Second, make a highlight on the characters left cheek to make it stand out a little more. Keep up the good work.