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Ilmari · Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2001 3:19 am

Hooray! Finished this space pic I've been working on for the past couple days.

It was fun to do something else than character drawing for a change. Tell me what you think.

u2art · Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2001 4:57 am

Hi ya

I like it. I like the windshield glase the most...it looks like juicy oil paint..which i love, i would eat the stuff if it wasnt toxic and cancer causing. The two ships in back that are blurred or whatever...they are confusing...it looks like 3 ships cloned one over the other...maybe clear them up a bit. Ithink they would be clearer in space because there is no atmosphere...no haze. The close ship is the focus though and I like that. Ilike the slight blue glare off of the wings. One crit, the back left wing of the foreground ship...the one in shadow...it looks off perspective...or something...maybe because it is the only one with absolutely no light on it. It would have some of the blue like the other wings...would it not?? Because your design is based on symmetry. Unless you are drawing a reflective glare....which in case maybe it should emmit a little light to helf clrify that dark wing....anyway, that is just my opinion, some things to think about..or not

Looks good

ARt
arts art

Ilmari · Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2001 5:13 am

Thanks, good points.

The back wing is off-perspective, my mistake.

The blue in the back wing would be a reflection of the planet, dunno if the light from the engine would light it up. Hmm, maybe on a diffuse level.

The big motherships in the back are shaped like terraced arrowheads.. I guess some of the highlights stop short and fixing that would probably help. Gotta try that.

[edit] fixed/tried to fix the wing and the big ship in the bg

[ June 17, 2001: Message edited by: Ilmari ]

Ilmari · Posted: Tue Jun 19, 2001 3:05 am

bump. just for the kicks.

Peaches · junior member Member # Joined: 19 Jun 2001 Posts: 27

good work. the smoke is nice, really. but the ship in the back looks flat and scribbelish to me.

LordArioch · Posted: Tue Jun 19, 2001 9:33 am

It's a bit dark, and seems to be lit mainly by ambient light (of which there is normally very little in space scenes). I would recommend stronger key light from the sun (which I assume is causing the highlight in the windshield), and a stronger bluish fill light from the reflected light of the planet (which itself should be brighter). The overall scene can still be dark, but there should be some stronger "kicker" highlights to add definition to the scene.

Collosimo · Posted: Tue Jun 19, 2001 4:03 pm

I like it! Looks like you had some fun doing it.

The spaceship is really good. The design and details are nice. Shiny window, panels, markings.

Generally the pic looks a bit unfinished. Clean up all the areas you can think of. I would say generally sharpen up the spacesip a little. Work on the planet a bit.

In my opinion I would have to say, lose the sparkling stars. They look a bit to fake and comical to me. It doesn't suit the painting, and clutters it too much. I also reckon you should desaturate the purple nebula a little bit.

Great work overall.

Collosimo · Posted: Tue Jun 19, 2001 4:07 pm

I like it! Looks like you had some fun doing it.

The spaceship is really good. The design and details are nice. Shiny window, panels, markings.

Generally the pic looks a bit unfinished. Clean up all the areas you can think of. I would say generally sharpen up the spacesip a little. Work on the planet a bit.

In my opinion I would have to say, lose the sparkling stars. They look a bit to fake and comical to me. It doesn't suit the painting, and clutters it too much. I also reckon you should desaturate the purple nebula a little bit.

Great work overall.