[Duncan]

update 4 posts down
Annother friend of mine from school.

Sketch
Photo
I know the angle of the head and expression are not quite the same as in the photo, but thats not important. Just as long as it looks like her. The eyes are too big, but thats OK, and the nose is too small, which isnt. She also looks older...
any other crits or comments would be greatly apreciated.
Thanks

[ January 03, 2002: Message edited by: Duncan ]

[Light]

Well it looks pretty good --but not my taste. Also, if you are going for photo-realism then you need to do a lot of work.

It looks like you painted it or thought of it much like you would color in a coloring book.

I suggest you study Sargeant, Rubens, and Hals.

Notice in the photograph the eyebrows are lighter in the highlight then in the shade. Your picture lacks this and that destroys the form and the illusion of depth.

Notice the hair in the photograph catches and reflects light. Also, notice the hair cast a shadow. The hair also has depth and reveals more details.

Notice in the photograph there are sharp darks around the nose and your picture lacks this.

Work on basic light and shade more. Also, try to use more then a few basic local colors.

[Duncan]

Light: not going for photo-realism, going for a painted look.
coloring book? thats a bit harsh. unless i am not understanding you.
thanks for the comments and observations though. they help.

Robert: thanks. Yeah, i do need to learn how to put more color variation in the skin tones..

[Robert Ashley]

You did a great job on this pic. Although you did make the girl in the painting a bit thinner looking than the one in the photograph. (also the nose needs to be a bit wider and more bulbose)

The thing that I would work on more than anything else is variation in colors. The girl you painted seems to have only a flat yellow fleshtone (which is a common mistake of a lot of paintings that make the subject look like they have T.B. in my opnion)

Check out this link for an example of using different colors for fleshtone and see how much more livly these paintings are:
http://www.simplestroke.com/l_self.html

Anyway, you came pretty close with proportions, but where off a little here and there. Overall a pretty spiffy job!

[Duncan]

Updated, taking in mind some of the comments.

i didnt change the size and shape of the nose, because i think its too late in the game to make a big change like that.